Summer magic
my first post here was reflecting summer, spent with my cousins before we moved. I miss those summers. So, what I did was a rewrite. I should add I have been on prose for around 8 months now.
ORIGINAL
Kingdoms
Enclosed between fences
one underground,
one in treetops.
A great struggle, good and evil
Who will win?
It changed every time:
as everyone knows,
ten-year-olds are temperamental.
Late summer nights spent
soaring
above castles
under great bridges
No matter the winner, it was always a victory
the wind in your face
the sun in your eyes
the dirt beneath the fingernails
Imagination is a wonderful thing.
EDITED NOW
The sun smiled
Dappled
Flowers among the
Sweet-smelling fruit trees
Sticky
Fingers and
Juice streaming down elbows
Smiles and
laughter
Echoes
Over handprints and
Kingdom walls
Among the golden and the green
And the sweet
And the crickets
Singing to starry
summer skies and
The smoke swirling above us all
Molding the stories and
The minds of
Us
The warriors who play in the sun
And flying through
The buzz of the grass
Swimming through the
Cerulean sky
Searching among the vegetables
Treasures in the sand now underneath
Our ragged fingernails
And the white wood
And rough red brick
Simply
Disappears.