Challenge
Empathy
Make your readers care about your characters. It’s a piece of advice you hear a lot in the writing world. Strange, isn’t it, that invoking empathy is a marketable skill?
Anyway, try to make us connect with a character in one short paragraph.
Leaving Berlin
Henry had already boarded the dark green Pullman. On the platform, Ingrid’s gaze caught the straight-edge evenness of the tan, canvas shades drawn to eye level on each of the car’s windows; every dangling pullring staring back like cyclopean minions. A thousand days would likely pass until their next rendezvous. Henry lifted his palm to his nostril, Ingrid’s lavender lingered along its length. A small girl peered back over Henry’s yellowed cane seat… her eyes made his mist bittersweetly.
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