Writing in 3rd person then in 1st person dialogue. (Part 2)

This part 2. In an effort to improve story-telling though dialogue, I've written a narrative introduction and a single character's inner thoughts to tell the same story. Short, sweet, to be continued. Inspired by "The Rockrose and the Thistle" by The Amazing Devil. As always, constructive criticism is welcome.

Screams reach through the sky down the cliffs to where the demon lay, tearing through scale and flesh, calling on the demon to mend the pain. Unable to sleep and unable to resist the summoning, the demon looks up yearning to see over the sheer cliff. Shattering shards of rock and exposing slick pores of magma with each step and reach, they ascend toward the human plane. The demon slips and struggles toward the poor screams and The demon is a summonable curse whose deals cannot be broken. Once their victim suffers physical pain, mental torture, and the shadow of the ever-present beast

"I have no choices. I must ascend.

The cliff I climb to reach you is echoing with your screams. I feel your pain with every crumbling step. Each claw dug into the cliff shatters loose jagged rock, revealing pores in the cliff that ooze magma.

It'd be best if I stayed here's impossible to deal with this much longer. Your pain would be fleeting if you would just let it be. It's impssThe burn in my eyes clouds my vision… all of this struggle just to torment you. Why do you scream so loud? Why do you go through such onerous rituals to summon me.

You've summoned a curse to soothe your woes. The shrieks you emit now shall become colder, madder and plague our existence together. I have no way to help you but since I have no choice, I promise I will try."