Humans (editing advice please & thanks!)
We tend to complicate things,
make heavy of light: intentions,
vision, plans, expectations, future
Nature,
is where we should look to see;
There's nothing more beautiful in its simplicity
than the wind blowing the grass lightly with its breeze
which in turn may turn the grass’s gaze from the sun’s beams
to the tree’s leaves, but it is of no consequence.
The wind means no harm, and even if its intentions were ill,
the grass happily bends to its will, accepting its fate with grace
because it has no vision, plans or expectations for the future other than
living
breathing
being
Bjc
I'll give it a closer look and send you message with any detailed comments or suggestions.
James
Beautiful
Bjc
LMSteiner...in general, I found the poem was more complicated than it needed to be. The opening, for example, could be simplified with a change like 'We complicate things/make heavy of light.' and drop the 'intentions,/future, vision, plans, expectations' phrasing. I think I'd want you to go at this again and simplify...let the poem's simplicity reflect the simplicity of your observation about the wind itself. I took a crack at it myself that I'll try to put in PM for you to see. As with all writing, the poem is yours and these are only some ideas for you to consider or reject outright. Hope it helps.